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You Were

04. 09. 2001

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Monie_Kim

Well, you can be with someone and care for him very much but when he organises your life too much it's better to go... - this one is a bit old (1999)

You were my tasteful morning cup of tea

Which made it all much easier to be

You were my good night story

That never let me start to worry

You were my shower drops and steam

That afterwards turned into the sweatest dream

You were the reason I could not leave

I really tried and wanted to believe

You were unaware of what was going through my mind

You could've known, you were so good, so kind

You were so full of plans for us and went ahead

It was impossible to get into your head

You were there but did not care what I wished

......I still remember the day last time your lips, I kissed

Monie_Kim

05. 09. 2001

Dát tip

Thank you very much :-) no need to say more.

Jako básnička hezké, jen dvě připomínky k angličtině: Ty sny v 3. sloce jsou asi sweetest. Nejsladší, ne nejpotivějsí. Slovosled v posledním verši je příliš invertovaný; i když v poezii se nedodržuje stavba věty tak úzkostlivě jako v běžné mluvě, tohle je na můj angličtinářský vkus trochu moc vyvrácené z kořenů.